DAY1

DEMANDS
Suppose Professor Chen is going to spend one year away from his institution to pursue research in atmospheric science. Write him an email to

1. invite him to join your research group, and
2. tell him that you can offer him some facilities.
3. You should write about 100 words.
4. Do not use your own name. Use “Professor Li” instead.
5. Do not write your address.

Dear Professor Chen,

I hope this E-mail[email] finds[finds] you well. I heard you are going to spend a year away to do atmospheric research[to conduct atmospheric research], and my research coincide[coincides] with yours, so I sincerely invite you to my group[join my research group]. The advantage and convenience[advantages and conveniences] I can provide for you are as followed[as follows].

First, my group will cover your everyday expenditure and offer you a cozy residence so that you can concentrate on your study[concentrate on your studies]. Second, you will have the access to[access to] our best atmospheric facilities, which have unparalleled accuracy. Last but not least, my group mates are all top-tier atmospheric scholars in China, and I believe our exchange will be deep and fruitful[profound and productive].

Suggestions:

Vocabulary Enhancements:

1. do -> conduct
2. cozy -> comfortable
3. expenditure -> expenses
4. top-tier -> prestigious
5. deep -> meaningful

Better Sentence Expressions:

1. I heard you are going to spend a year away to do atmospheric research, and my research coincide with yours, so I sincerely invite you to my group.
   -> “I understand that you will be dedicating a year to atmospheric research, which aligns well with my own work, and I would like to warmly invite you to join my research group.”

2. The advantage and convenience I can provide for you are as followed.
   -> “I am pleased to share the benefits and facilities I can offer you.”

3. First, my group will cover your everyday expenditure and offer you a cozy residence so that you can concentrate on your study.
   -> “To start, my group will cover your living expenses and provide you with a comfortable accommodation, allowing you to focus on your studies.”

4. Second, you will have the access to our best atmospheric facilities, which have unparalleled accuracy.
   -> “In addition, you will have access to our state-of-the-art atmospheric facilities, known for their exceptional accuracy.”

5. Last but not least, my group mates are all top-tier atmospheric scholars in China, and I believe our exchange will be deep and fruitful.
   -> “Finally, my fellow group members are esteemed atmospheric scholars in China, and I am confident that our collaboration will be both meaningful and productive.”

Refined Version:

Dear Professor Chen,

I hope this email finds you well. I understand that you will be dedicating a year to atmospheric research, which aligns well with my own work, and I would like to warmly invite you to join my research group. I am pleased to share the benefits and facilities I can offer you.

To start, my group will cover your living expenses and provide you with comfortable accommodation, allowing you to focus on your studies. In addition, you will have access to our state-of-the-art atmospheric facilities, known for their exceptional accuracy. Finally, my fellow group members are esteemed atmospheric scholars in China, and I am confident that our collaboration will be both meaningful and productive.

Looking forward to the possibility of working together.

Best regards,
Professor Li

DAY2

Step 1: Error Correction

Dear Laura,

I’m writing this letter with my great sadness to tell you, I have to [I must] cancel my birthday party, which is originally scheduled on [was originally scheduled for] next Friday. I feel immense [immensely] sorry for inconvenience it may cause to you [any inconvenience this may cause you/the inconvenience this may cause].

I have no choice to [must] cancel my birthday party, because my dissertation was rejected yesterday, for which reason [was rejected yesterday. Consequently / Because of this / For this reason,] I have to go back to China and modify my dissertation. Otherwise I may undertake [face/run] the risk of delaying graduation. I hope you can understand my determination [situation/position/predicament].

Sorry again about this.

Yours sincerely
Lilith

Step 2: Suggestions for Improvement

• sadness -> disappointment/regret

• cancel -> postpone (If rescheduling is a possibility)

• modify -> revise/amend

• delaying graduation -> delayed graduation/graduating late

• I’m writing this letter with my great sadness to tell you, I must cancel my birthday party, which was originally scheduled for next Friday.
  -> I am writing to you with deep regret to inform you that I must cancel my birthday party, which was scheduled for next Friday.

• I feel immensely sorry for any inconvenience this may cause you.
  -> I sincerely apologize for any inconvenience this may cause.

• I must cancel my birthday party, because my dissertation was rejected yesterday. Consequently, I have to go back to China and modify my dissertation.
  -> The cancellation is unavoidable as my dissertation was rejected yesterday, necessitating my return to China to revise it.

• Otherwise I may face the risk of delaying graduation.
  -> Failure to do so would jeopardize my timely graduation.

• I hope you can understand my situation.
  -> I trust you understand the urgency of this situation. / I appreciate your understanding in this matter.

Refined Version1 (Band 9 Potential)

Dear Laura,

I am writing to you with deep regret to inform you that I must postpone my birthday celebration, originally planned for next Friday. I sincerely apologize for any inconvenience this unavoidable change may cause.

My dissertation was unfortunately rejected yesterday. This necessitates my immediate return to China to undertake the necessary revisions. Failure to do so would jeopardize my timely graduation.

I understand this news is disappointing, and I am truly sorry for having to postpone the festivities. I hope to reschedule once my academic commitments are settled and will keep you informed. Thank you for your understanding.

Yours sincerely,

Lilith

Refined Version2

Dear Laura,

I hope this letter finds you well. It is with profound regret that I must inform you of the need to call off my birthday party planned for next Friday. Please accept my sincere apologies for any inconvenience this may cause.

Yesterday, I received the distressing news that my dissertation was rejected. This unforeseen circumstance demands my urgent attention, and I need to return to China to revise and resubmit it. Failure to address this promptly could jeopardize my timely graduation, which I must avoid.

I was truly looking forward to celebrating with you and our friends. Your support and friendship mean the world to me, and I trust you understand the urgency of this matter. I look forward to reconnecting once this is resolved and making up for the missed celebration.

Thank you for your understanding and patience. Please convey my apologies to anyone else who was anticipating the party.

Warm regards,

Lilith

DAY3

Step 1: Error Correction

Dear officer,

I hope this letter finds you well. I’m writing to inquire the admission affairs [about the admission status] for my application to Washington University 3 months ago [submitted three months ago], and I did not receive any reply till now [have not received any reply until now]. I hope you can understand my anxiety.

Prompt reply will be appreciable [A prompt reply would be appreciated] so that I can make other adjustments timely [in a timely manner]. Phone call will be better [A phone call would be preferable], and my phone number is xxxx.

Looking for [Looking forward to] your reply.

Best regards
Li Ming

Step 2: Suggestions for Improvement

• officer -> Admissions Officer
• anxiety -> concern
• adjustments -> arrangements
• preferable -> more convenient
• appreciated -> greatly appreciated

Better Sentence Expressions:

1. “I hope you can understand my anxiety.”
   → “I hope you understand my concern regarding this matter.”

2. “I can make other adjustments in a timely manner.”
   → “I can make alternative arrangements promptly if necessary.”

3. “A phone call would be preferable, and my phone number is xxxx.”
   → “It would be more convenient to discuss this over the phone; my number is xxxx.”

4. “I have not received any reply until now.”
   → “I have yet to receive a response.”

5. “Looking forward to your reply.”
   → “I eagerly await your prompt response.”

Refined Version 1

Dear Admissions Officer,

I hope this letter finds you well. I’m writing to inquire about the admission status of my application to Washington University, which I submitted three months ago, as I have yet to receive a response. I hope you understand my concern regarding this matter.

A prompt reply would be greatly appreciated so that I can make alternative arrangements in a timely manner if necessary. It would be more convenient to discuss this over the phone; my number is xxxx.

I eagerly await your prompt response.

Best regards,
Li Ming

Refined Version 2

Dear Central Washington University Admissions Office,

I am writing to follow up on the status of my application to Central Washington University. I submitted my application three months ago and have yet to receive a decision.

I understand that admissions decisions require careful consideration, but I would be grateful for an update at your earliest convenience. Knowing the status of my application will allow me to finalize my academic plans for the upcoming term. You can reach me by phone at xxxx.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,
Li Ming

其他

1. 对官方机构写信或称呼，用 office 或 xxx officer，万能用法则是 Dear Sir or Madam
2. follow up on 跟进（进展、消息）、update 最新消息
3. sth will be beter -> sth would be preferable
4. timely 是形容词而非副词！ in a timely manner
5. inquire about sth/sb

DAY4

Step 1: Error Correction

Dear Washington University admission office[Admissions Office],

I’m writing this letter to express my deep regret that I can’t[cannot] gather all my materials before the stated deadline, and to inquire whether there is still a possibility of gaining the admission[gaining admission].

Owing to the epidemic situation, part[some] of the materials sent from my high school will be delayed[are being delayed] for a week, so I can’t receive[cannot receive] the materials in a timely manner. For this reason, I couldn’t send[will not be able to send] all my material[materials] before the deadline. Although disappointed and desperate, I hope you give[can give] me a chance. And[The] materials are enclosed[I have enclosed the materials I have gathered].

A prompt reply will be appreciated.

Best regards,
Li Ming

Step 2: Suggestions for Improvement

• deep regret -> profound regret
• gather -> compile
• possibility -> opportunity
• owing to -> due to
• epidemic situation -> current pandemic
• disappointed and desperate -> disheartened
• give me a chance -> consider granting me an opportunity
• materials -> documents
• prompt reply -> prompt response
• appreciated -> greatly appreciated

Better Sentence Expressions:

1. “I’m writing this letter to express my deep regret that I cannot gather all my materials before the stated deadline, and to inquire whether there is still a possibility of gaining admission.”
   → “I am writing to express my profound regret that I cannot submit all of my required documents before the specified deadline and to inquire if there remains an opportunity for admission.”

2. “Owing to the epidemic situation, some of the materials sent from my high school are being delayed for a week, so I cannot receive the materials in a timely manner.”
   → “Due to the current pandemic, some documents from my high school have been delayed by a week, preventing me from receiving them promptly.”

3. “For this reason, I will not be able to send all my materials before the deadline.”
   → “As a result, I will not be able to submit all my documents prior to the deadline.”

4. “Although disappointed and desperate, I hope you can give me a chance.”
   → “Despite my disappointment, I sincerely hope you might consider granting me an opportunity.”

5. “A prompt reply will be appreciated.”
   → “I would greatly appreciate a prompt response.”

Refined Version 1

Dear Admissions Office of Washington University,

I am writing to express my profound regret that I cannot submit all of my required documents before the specified deadline and to inquire if there remains an opportunity for admission.

Due to the current pandemic, some documents from my high school have been delayed by a week, preventing me from receiving them promptly. As a result, I will not be able to provide all my materials prior to the deadline.Despite my disappointment, I sincerely hope you might consider granting me an opportunity. I have enclosed the documents I have been able to compile.

I would greatly appreciate a prompt response.

Best regards,
Li Ming

Refined Version 2

Dear Admissions Committee,

I am writing to express my sincere interest in applying to Washington University. Unfortunately, due to unforeseen circumstances, I am unable to submit all my application materials by the stated deadline. I am currently awaiting a crucial document that is delayed due to postal issues. I assure you that I am doing everything possible to expedite the process.

I am deeply committed to joining your esteemed institution and am confident that my academic background and passion for learning align with your values. I kindly request an extension to submit the remaining materials. Thank you for considering my application.

Sincerely,
Li Ming

DAY5

Dear Li Ming,

We are Admissions Committee [the Admissions Committee] of Washington University, and we have received your application for admission. After careful and thorough discussion, we unanimously approved of[approved] your application. There is[are] some note-worthy[noteworthy] details you should know, allowing you get[to get] fully prepared for the new term.

First, you are expected to read the regulation manual which has been enclosed with this letter. Second, do not forget your student card when you report for fear that you cannot get into the campus.

Welcome to Washington University.

Best regards,

The Admissions Office

Vocabulary Suggestions:

• application -> submission
• careful and thorough discussion -> meticulous deliberation
• details -> information
• regulation manual -> policy handbook
• student card -> student identification
• get into the campus -> access the campus

Sentence Improvements:

• We are the Admissions Committee of Washington University, and we have received your application for admission.
  “We, the Admissions Committee of Washington University, are pleased to inform you that we have received your application.”

• After careful and thorough discussion, we unanimously approved your application.
  “After meticulous deliberation, we are delighted to announce that your application has been unanimously approved.”

• There are some noteworthy details you should know, allowing you to get fully prepared for the new term.
  “To ensure you are thoroughly prepared for the upcoming term, we would like to bring some important information to your attention.”

• First, you are expected to read the regulation manual which has been enclosed with this letter.
  “Firstly, please review the enclosed policy handbook.”

• Second, do not forget your student card when you report for fear that you cannot get into the campus.
  “Secondly, please remember to bring your student identification upon registration to ensure seamless access to the campus.”

Refined Essay 1:

Dear Li Ming,

We, the Admissions Committee of Washington University, are pleased to inform you that we have received your application. After meticulous deliberation, we are delighted to announce that your application has been unanimously approved. To ensure you are thoroughly prepared for the upcoming term, we would like to bring some important information to your attention.

Firstly, please review the enclosed policy handbook, which contains essential guidelines and regulations pertaining to your studies and campus life. Secondly, kindly remember to bring your student identification upon registration to ensure seamless access to university facilities.

Once again, we warmly welcome you to Washington University and eagerly anticipate your arrival. Should you have any questions or require further assistance, please do not hesitate to contact us.

Best regards,

The Admissions Office

Refined Essay 2:

Dear Li Ming,

We are pleased to inform you that you have been admitted to Washington University graduate program in Business Administration for the coming semester.

You should plan to arrive by Jan. 8th, which will allow ample time for orientation and registration procedures.

You will be expected to pay an estimated $1,800 per semester. And you will need to bring at least $2,000 with you to pay for initial expenses before you can earn money by doing any part-time job or getting any scholarship.

If you have any question concerning information in this letter or the enclosure, please feel free to contact us by phoning 555-222-888.

The Admissions Office

官方通知最好都带上最后一段话。

Refined Essay 3:

Dear Li Ming,

The Admissions Committee of Washington University is pleased to inform you that your application for admission has been approved following a thorough review. We have compiled some essential information to facilitate your smooth transition into the upcoming term.

Kindly review the attached student handbook, which outlines key regulations and procedures. Additionally, please remember to bring your student identification card upon arrival, as it will be necessary for accessing campus facilities.

We eagerly anticipate welcoming you to Washington University.

Sincerely,

The Admissions Office

DAY6

Dear Ann,

I hope this letter finds you well. I understand that you will end the high school courses [finish your high school studies] soon and are now planning the future career [your future career]. I would like to bring [offer] you some advice.

To start, in my opinion, taking a college is a better choice, allowing you to broaden your horizon [horizons] and to hone your skill [skills], which will exert great benefits on your cause [greatly benefit your future career]. Besides, the working force [workforce] market is much [very] saturated now, making the opportunity for getting a good job more difficult [it more difficult to get a good job].Last but not least, if you want to do, just do it, [Last but not least, if there is something you want to do, just go for it,] as you are young, having much space to make mistakes [and have plenty of room to make mistakes], and I am always by your side.

Best regards,

Li Ming

Vocabulary Suggestions:

• understand -> comprehend
• planning -> contemplating
• advice -> guidance
• better choice -> preferable option
• broaden -> expand
• horizons -> perspectives
• hone -> refine
• skills -> abilities
• very saturated -> highly competitive
• mistakes -> missteps

Sentence Improvements:

• I understand that you will finish your high school studies soon and are now planning your future career.
  
  “As you near the completion of your high school education and contemplate your future career, I wanted to reach out.”

• I would like to offer you some advice.
  
  “I would like to share some guidance with you.”

• Attending college is a better choice as it allows you to broaden your horizons and hone your skills, which will greatly benefit your future career.
  
  “Pursuing higher education is a preferable option, enabling you to expand your perspectives and refine your abilities, which will significantly enhance your career prospects.”

• Besides, the workforce market is very saturated now, making it more difficult to get a good job.
  
  “Moreover, the current job market is highly competitive, rendering it more challenging to secure a desirable position.”

• Last but not least, if there is something you want to do, just go for it, as you are young and have plenty of room to make mistakes, and I am always by your side.
  
  “Lastly, embrace any opportunity you are passionate about, for you are young with ample time to learn from missteps, and remember that I am always here to support you.”

Refined Essay 1:

Dear Ann,

I trust this letter finds you in good health. As you near the completion of your high school education and contemplate your future career, I wanted to reach out. I would like to offer you some guidance.

In my opinion, pursuing higher education is a preferable option, enabling you to expand your perspectives and refine your abilities, which will significantly enhance your career prospects. Moreover, the current job market is highly competitive, rendering it more challenging to secure a desirable position without a college degree.

Lastly, embrace any opportunity you are passionate about, for you are young with ample time to learn from missteps. Remember that I am always here to support you.

Best regards,

Li Ming

Refined Essay 2：

Subject: Thinking of you!

Hi Ann,

I heard you’re graduating soon! Congratulations! This is such a big accomplishment, and I’m so proud of you. I know you’re probably weighing some big decisions right now. It’s okay to feel unsure about whether to start working or go to college. Both paths have a lot to offer. Think about what feels right for you and what will help you reach your goals, whatever they may be. Remember, you’re capable of amazing things! I’m here to support you, no matter what you decide.

Love,

Li Ming

Refined Essay 3：

Dear Ann,

Congratulations on nearing the completion of your high school journey! I understand that you’re contemplating whether to pursue a college education or enter the workforce. I highly recommend that you choose to attend college. A college education can broaden your knowledge base and offer you more career options and development opportunities. While working can provide immediate income, in the long run, a college degree will make you more competitive in the job market.

No matter what decision you make, I will support you. Believe in yourself, and I’m confident you will achieve success in your future endeavors!

Best regards,

Li Ming

DAY7

Dear Brian,

I hope this message finds you well. I wanted to express my heartfelt thanks for the wonderful weekend at your home. Your family’s hospitality was truly exceptional, and I felt so welcomed and comfortable. The delicious meals and engaging conversations made my visit unforgettable.

I would love to return the favor and invite you to my home next weekend. It would be a pleasure to host you and show you around my neighborhood. Please let me know if you’re available.

Thank you once again for everything.

Best regards,

Li Ming

Dear Brian,

I hope you’re doing well. I wanted to extend my gratitude for the amazing hospitality I experienced at your home last weekend. Your family was so welcoming, and I thoroughly enjoyed every moment spent with you all.

I would like to invite you to my home for a weekend visit. It would be wonderful to have you over and share some good times together. Please let me know a convenient time for you.

Thank you once more for your kindness.

Sincerely,
Li Ming

Dear Brian,

I hope this letter finds you well. I want to express my sincere gratitude for the warm hospitality your family extended to me during my visit last weekend. It was truly a pleasure to experience the kindness and welcoming atmosphere of your home.

I would be honored to invite you to visit my home as well. It would be a wonderful opportunity for us to continue building our friendship and share more of our lives with one another. I am looking forward to the chance to host you and please let me know if you are available.

Thank you again for the memorable experience.

Sincerely,
Li Ming

DAY8

Step 1: Original Text with Errors Highlighted

Dear Murphy,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to extend my gratitude for your help with my study those[these] days, rendering me have a profound progress[which enabled me to make significant progress]. Your patience and kindness was[were] really impressive, which has encouraged me a lot.

As return[In return] for your help, I send[am sending] you a select[carefully selected] gift, enclosed with this letter. It is a special fountain pen without adding ink[that does not require refilling], as if there is a source in it[as if it has an endless supply]. I hope our friendship would[will] be like the pen and will never run out.

Thank you once again for your kindness.

Best regards,

Liming.

Step 2: Suggestions

Vocabulary Enhancements:

• help -> assistance
• patience -> forbearance
• kindness -> compassion
• impressive -> commendable
• special (gift) -> exquisite

Improved Sentences:

1. I hope this letter finds you well.

   -> “I trust this letter reaches you in good health and high spirits.”

2. I am writing to extend my gratitude for your help with my studies these days, which enabled me to make significant progress.

   -> “I am writing to express my profound gratitude for your invaluable assistance with my studies, which has greatly contributed to my remarkable progress.”

3. Your patience and kindness were really impressive, which has encouraged me a lot.

   -> “Your exceptional patience and compassion have been truly inspiring, providing me with immense encouragement.”

4. As a token of appreciation for your help, I am sending you a special gift, enclosed with this letter.

   -> “To show my appreciation for your support, I have enclosed a unique gift with this letter.”

5. It is a special fountain pen that does not require refilling, as if it has an endless supply.

   -> “It is an exquisite fountain pen with an enduring ink supply, as if it possesses an endless source.”

Refined Essay 1:

Dear Murphy,

I trust this letter reaches you in good health and high spirits. I am writing to express my profound gratitude for your invaluable assistance with my studies, which has greatly contributed to my remarkable progress. Your exceptional patience and compassion have been truly inspiring, providing me with immense encouragement.

To show my appreciation for your support, I have enclosed an exquisite gift with this letter. It is a unique fountain pen with an enduring ink supply, as if it possesses an endless source. May our camaraderie, like this pen, be ever-flowing and inexhaustible.

Thank you once again for your generosity.

Best regards,

Liming.

Refined Essay 2:

Dear Murphy,

I hope this letter finds you well. I wanted to express my heartfelt gratitude for all the support you’ve given me with my studies. To show my appreciation, I am sending you a book that I think you will enjoy. It’s a novel by your favorite author, and I remember you mentioning how much you wanted to read it.

Your guidance and patience have been invaluable to me, and I truly couldn’t have achieved my goals without your help. I hope this gift brings you as much joy as your support has brought me.

Thank you once again.

Best regards,

Li Ming

Refined Essay 3:

Dear Murphy,

I’m writing to express my sincere gratitude for your invaluable assistance with my studies over the past few weeks. Your help has been instrumental in my recent academic progress, and I truly appreciate the time and effort you dedicated to supporting me.

As a small gesture of my appreciation, I’ve enclosed a gift with this letter. It’s a unique fountain pen with a self-filling mechanism, chosen with the hope that our friendship, like the ink in this pen, will continue to flow smoothly and uninterrupted for years to come.

Thank you again for your unwavering support and encouragement. I feel fortunate to have you as a friend.

Warmly,

Liming

Refined Essay 4:

Dear Murphy,

Please allow me to send you a basket of assorted fruits I just received from my hometown, where they are some of the famous produce.

It’s a trifling[微不足道的] gift, but I hope you will accept it as a token of my gratitude for your helping me with my study.

These tropical fruits are very popular in my hometown, and my mom often sends them to me because I like them very much. If you like to eat them, too, please let me know. I will be glad to share with you next time.

Sincerely yours,

Li Ming

DAY9

Dear Mary,

I hope this email finds you in high spirits. I phoned you several times yesterday but you didn’t answer my calls, rendering me worry[worried] about you, as you never miss the calls[a call] before.

Please let me know what happened if possible. If you are in trouble, I would like to help you at my best, which is my duty as your friend.[I am here to support you to the best of my ability, as it is my responsibility as your friend.] And if it was my self-unaware mistakes[my unintentional mistakes] that made you angry and do not pick up my phone call[caused you not to answer my calls], I sincerely apologize for it.

A prompt reply will be appreciated as you read this email.

Yours,
Li Ming

render sb/sth adj 而不能 render sb do sth

Suggestions:

Vocabulary Enhancement:

• high -> positive
• phoned -> called
• worry -> concerned
• help -> assist
• appreciate -> value

Better Sentence Expressions:
I hope this email finds you in high spirits.
“I hope this email finds you in a positive state of mind.”

I phoned you several times yesterday but you didn’t answer my calls.
“I attempted to reach you multiple times yesterday, but unfortunately, I could not get through.”

Please let me know what happened if possible.
“If you could provide some insight into the situation, I would greatly appreciate it.”

If you are in trouble I would like to help you at my best.
“Should you be facing any difficulties, I am here to offer my full support.”

A prompt reply will be appreciated as you read this email.
“I would be grateful for a swift response upon your reading this email.”

Refined Version 1:

Dear Mary,

I hope this email finds you in a positive state of mind. I attempted to reach you multiple times yesterday, but unfortunately, I could not get through. This has left me feeling concerned, especially since you typically answer my calls.

If you could provide some insight into the situation, I would greatly appreciate it. Should you be facing any difficulties, please don’t hesitate to tell me, as it is my responsibility as your friend. Additionally, if my unintentional mistakes have caused any distress and led to your silence, I sincerely apologize.

I would be grateful for a swift response upon your reading this email.

Yours,
Li Ming

Refined Version 2:

Dear Mary,

I sincerely hope this email finds you in excellent mood. I have attempted to reach you several times yesterday, but you did not pick up, which has caused me great concern, as this is highly unusual for you.

I would greatly appreciate if you could provide me with an explanation of the situation, if you are able to do so. Should you be facing any difficulties, please know that I am here to assist you to the best of my abilities, as it is my duty as your friend to support you. Moreover, if my unintentional actions have in any way upset you and caused you to decline answering my calls, I profoundly apologize.

A prompt response would be deeply valued upon your reading this email.

Yours sincerely, Li Ming

Should（表示可能）假如，万一

• Should you decide to join us, we would be very happy.如果你决定加入我们，我们会非常高兴。
• In case you should need any help, here’s my number.万一你需要帮助的话，这是我的电话号码。
• Should anyone call (= if anyone calls) , please tell them I’m busy.如果有人打电话来，请告诉他我正忙着。

DAY10

Original Text with Errors Highlighted:

Dear Ken,

I hope this letter finds you better[well]. I unfortunately understood that you are getting ill[ill], which has caused me great concerns[concern].

You are supposed to focus on your recovery during this period and there is no need to worry about your study[studies]. Upon you getting better, I would like to assist you with these missed lessons. And I will[Moreover, I will] keep you up to speed with important information about classes. If you need any other help, please don’t hesitate to tell me, as I am always here to support you.

Yours,
Li Ming.

Suggestions:

Vocabulary Improvements:

1. better -> well
2. getting ill -> ill
3. concerns -> concern
4. no need -> there is no need
5. study -> studies
6. getting better -> your recovery
7. And I will -> Moreover, I will

Sentence Expression Replacements:

1. I hope this letter finds you better.
   “I hope this letter finds you in good health.”

2. I unfortunately understood that you are getting ill, which has caused me great concerns.
   “I was saddened to learn that you are unwell, which has caused me significant worry.”

3. You are supposed to focus on your recovery during this period and no need to worry about your study.
   “It is important for you to concentrate on your recovery at this time, so please do not concern yourself with your studies.”

4. Upon you getting better, I would like to assist you with these missed lessons.
   “Once you have recovered, I would be delighted to help you catch up on the lessons you have missed.”

5. And I will keep you up to speed with important information about classes.
   “Furthermore, I will ensure that you are updated with crucial information related to your classes.”

Refined Essay 1:

Dear Ken,

I hope this letter finds you in good health. I was saddened to learn that you are unwell, which has caused me significant worry.

It is important for you to concentrate on your recovery at this time, so please do not concern yourself with your studies. Once you have recovered, I would be delighted to help you catch up on the lessons you have missed. Furthermore, I will ensure that you are updated with crucial information related to your classes. If you require any additional support, please do not hesitate to reach out to me, as I am always here to assist you.

Yours,
Li Ming.

Refined Essay 2:

Dear Ken,

Sorry to hear of your illness. I learned about your illness only this morning when I phoned your home. How do you feel now? I hope you have a full recovery soon.

I’ll call in to see you this weekend. Our classmates Jane and Mark are also worried about you. They ask me to bring their gifts and cards to you when I come to see you. And do you want me to bring you anything else? Call me if you need.

Please have a good rest. Don’t worry about your missed lessons. I will help you to make them up when you get well.

Truly,

Li Ming

Refined Essay 3:

Dear Ken,

I was really sorry to hear that you’re not feeling well. I hope you’re taking it easy and getting plenty of rest. Remember, your health is the most important thing right now, and I’m sure you’ll be back on your feet soon.

In the meantime, don’t worry about the lessons you’ve missed. I’m more than happy to help you catch up. I can share my notes and explain anything you find difficult. Just let me know when you’re ready, and we can go over everything together.

Take care and get well soon!

Best wishes,
Li Ming

Refined Essay 4:
Dear Ken,

I was saddened to hear that you are not feeling well. Please know that I’m thinking of you and wishing you a swift recovery. This time can be tough, but remember that your strength will see you through.

To make things easier for you during your recovery, I would be glad to help with your missed lessons. I can send you notes or schedule some time to go over the subjects together. Your health is the priority, and we’ll ensure you stay on track.

Take care of yourself, and I look forward to seeing you back to your vibrant self soon!

Warm wishes,
Li Ming

DAY 11

Step 1: Original Text with Errors Highlighted

Dear Ken,

I just learned about that[the fact that] you are going to move to another dorm room this weekend, which has caused me a little sadness. Although I am not willing to get apart part with[from] you, I respect your choice.

It was an impressive period of living with you, and your kindness and generosity always make[made] me feel that you are my family. As a token of our friendship, I would like to send you a special fountain pen, which has an endless ink supply, as if there is[there were] a magic source within. I hope our friendship will be inexhaustible, just like the pen.

If you require any help, please don’t hesitate to tell me.

Sincerely,
Li Ming

Step 2: Suggestions for Improvement

Vocabulary Suggestions:

1. learned -> discovered
2. sadness -> sorrow
3. impressive -> remarkable
4. kindness -> benevolence
5. token -> symbol

Better Sentence Expressions:

1. I just learned about that you are going to move to another dorm room this weekend, which has caused me a little sadness.
   “I recently discovered that you will be moving to another dorm room this weekend, which has filled me with a sense of sorrow.”

2. Although I am not willing to get apart with you, I respect your choice.
   “While I am reluctant to part ways with you, I fully respect your decision.”

3. It was an impressive period of living with you, and your kindness and generosity always make me feel that you are my family.
   “Living with you has been a remarkable experience, and your benevolence and generosity have consistently made me feel like we are family.”

4. As a token of our friendship, I would like to send you a special fountain pen, which has an endless ink supply, as if there is a magic source within.
   “As a symbol of our enduring friendship, I would like to gift you a special fountain pen that promises an endless supply of ink, as if it contains a magical source.”

5. If you require any help, please don’t hesitate to tell me.
   “Should you need any assistance, please do not hesitate to reach out to me.”

Refined Essay 1:

Dear Ken,

I recently discovered that you will be moving to another dorm room this weekend, which has filled me with a sense of sorrow. While I am reluctant to part ways with you, I fully respect your decision.

Living with you has been a remarkable experience, and your kindness and generosity have consistently made me feel like we are family. As a symbol of our enduring friendship, I would like to gift you a special fountain pen that promises an endless supply of ink, as if it contains a magical source. I sincerely hope that our friendship remains inexhaustible, just like the pen itself.

Should you need any assistance, please do not hesitate to reach out to me.

Sincerely,
Li Ming

Refined Essay 2:

Dear Ken,

I hope this note finds you well. As you prepare for your move this weekend, I want to offer my assistance. Moving can be quite a daunting task, and I’d be more than happy to lend a hand with packing or transporting your belongings. Together, we can make the process smoother and more enjoyable.

Additionally, I’ve prepared a little gift for you—a personalized mug to accompany you in your new room. May it be a reminder of our shared memories and a cozy vessel for your favorite drinks.

Wishing you a seamless transition!

Warm regards,
Li Ming

Refined Essay 3:

Dear Ken,

I was so sorry to hear you’re moving out this weekend! Time really flies. I wanted to offer my assistance with the packing and moving process; even a few extra hands can make a significant difference. Let me know if there’s anything I can do to help lighten your load.

As a small token of my appreciation for our time living together, I’ve included a smooth-writing pen – a small thing, but hopefully useful in your new academic pursuits. It’s been a pleasure sharing this space with you, and I’ll truly miss our chats and late-night movie marathons. I hope your new dorm is everything you’ve wished for.

Best wishes,

Li Ming

十日总结

• 问候语：

  1. I hope this email finds you well / in good health / in high spirits.

• 听说、听闻：

  1. I understand that / hear of / learn about the fact that / discover that.

• 邀请：

  1. I sincerely/warmly invite you to
  2. I would love to return the favor and invite you to
  3. It would be a pleasure to host you
  4. Please let me know if you’re available.

• 提供建议：

  1. I would like to share / provide some guidance / advice with you.
  2. Some feasible practices / suggestions are as follows.

• 乐意：

  1. I am pleased / delighted to
  2. It is my pleasure to
  3. I would like to

• 我相信/认为

  1. I am confident that
  2. I believe that

• 期望

  1. Looking forward to the possibility/chance of

• 行文连接词：

  1. 首先：To start / Firstly / To begin with /
  2. 然后：In addition / Moreover / Secondly / Besides
  3. 最后：Last but not least / Finally / In summary

• 伴随状语：

  1. allowing / enabling …
  2. rendering …
  3. necessitating …
  4. preventing me from …
  5. providing me with

• 被动状态：

  1. known for…

• 形容词搭配：

  with deep/profound regret 、 disappointing/distressing news、unforeseen circumstance、profound gratitude、immense encouragement、exquisite gift、enduring/inexhaustible friendship/camaraderie

• 表示打扰/不幸：

  1. I am immensely sorry for any inconvenience it may cause you
  2. I am immensely sorry to hear that…

• 因此（原因）

  Consequently / Because of this / For this reason / As a result

• 心情：

  1. disappointment / regret / sorrow / sadness / distress
  2. saddened / delighted / distressed /

• 如果：

  1. Failure to do so would … 如果不这样做，就会…

  2. Should you have any questions / need any assistance, please do not hesitate to reach/contact me. 如果你有任何疑问/需要任何帮助，请与我联系。

  3. Should you be facing any difficulties, I am always here to offer my unwavering support

  4. Should you have any question concerning information in this letter or the enclosure, please feel free to contact us by phoning 555-222-888.

     通知信都可以采用此结尾！

• 感谢/请求原谅/理解，表示抱歉/感谢

  1. I trust/hope you understand the urgency of this situation / my concern pertaining to/regarding/concerning this matter.
  2. I greatly appreciate your understanding in this matter.
  3. I sincerely apologize for any inconvenience this may cause.
  4. Please accept my sincere apologies for …
  5. Thank you for your understanding and patience
  6. Please convey my apologies to anyone affected.
  7. I would be grateful for
  8. I’m writing this letter to express/extend my deep/profound regret / apology
  9. I wanted to express/extend my heartfelt / cordial thanks for
  10. I truly appreciate the time and effort you dedicated to supporting me

• 表示支持：

  1. Kindly remember that I am always here to support you as your friend.
  2. I truly want you to know that I will always provide you with unwavering support, no matter what challenges you face.

• 期待回信/表示祝福：

  1. A prompt reply would be greatly appreciated
  2. Please reply to me at your earliest convenience.
  3. Looking forward to your prompt reply
  4. I eagerly await your prompt response
  5. Wishing you a seamless transition!
  6. I hope your new life/journey is everything you’ve wished for.

• 希望对方以某种方式：

  1. A phone call would be preferable
  2. It would be more convenient/preferable to

• 希望对方做某事：

  1. I sincerely hope you might consider granting me an opportunity.
  2. You are supposed/expected to
  3. You are encouraged to
  4. It would be helpful if you could
  5. It’s advisable / desirable to…

• 常用副词：

  unfortunately（heard）、immensely（sorry）、greatly（appreciate）、kindly（敬）、fully（prepare/recover）、warmly（invite/welcome）、significantly（improve）、truly（exceptional）、more than（pleased）

• 解释原因：

  1. I have no alternative choice but this.

• 结尾敬辞

  Best/Warm regards、Yours、Yours truly、Yours sincerely、

词汇替换：

• friendship -> camaraderie
• careful -> meticulous
• deep -> profound
• express -> extend
• regarding/concerning -> pertaining to

其他：

• 有时候用 kindly 代替 please 更谦虚：
  Kindly reach out if you have any questions or need assistance.
  kindly remember to bring your student identification.

优美句子：

• May it be a reminder of our shared memories

短语/词汇积累：

• aligns well with 与……相吻合；目标、价值观或利益相一致。

• comfortable accommodation 舒适的住宿

• state-of-the-art 最先进的

• esteemed 令人尊敬的

• was originally scheduled for 原定于

• call off = cancel 取消

• make up for 弥补

• in a timely manner 及时地

• inquire about sth 咨询

• follow up on sth跟进某事。
  keep up-to-date on sth
  keep abreast of sth

  be updated with

• reach sb / reach out to sb 与某人联系

• postal 邮政的

• expedite 加速、促进

• I am deeply committed to doing 致力于

• noteworthy 值得注意的

• approved of sth 批准；
  approve sth 同意

• for fear that 、in case that 以防

• after meticulous deliberation / … following a thorough review 经过慎重讨论

• unanimously approved 一致同意

• seamless 无缝的、流畅的
  seamless acess 顺利访问
  seamless transition 流程过渡

• 关于：concerning、regarding、pertaining to

• orientation 适应

  The company provides extensive training during the orientation to help new employees adapt to the corporate culture.公司在员工入职培训期间提供广泛的培训，以帮助新员工适应企业文化。
  Orientation sessions at the university aim to facilitate students’ adaptation to campus life.大学的迎新活动旨在促进学生适应校园生活。

• 附函的 attached(电子邮箱) / enclosed(纸质书信)

• offer some advice

• expand your perspectives / horizons拓展你的眼界

• secure 努力获得

• be passionate about

• accomplishment / achievement / feat成就

• weigh权衡、考量

• in return 作为回报

• instrumental (help)起重要作用的

• as a token of (our friendship / my gratitude)

• call in 拜访

• see sb through 帮某人度过难关

DAY12

​ Notice
Dear international students,

We will host a party for international students next Friday at central [the central] gym. This party is aimed to [aimed at] facilitate the exchange of diverse culture [diverse cultures] and offer all you new international students a chance to learn about our university culture and life, through which we hope you will feel like home [at home]. The agenda of this party includes a bus ride around the campus, tasting [tasting] traditional Chinese food and watching the school opera.

We sincerely invite you to join the party.
The Student Union

Suggestions

Better and more advanced vocabulary suggestions:

• party -> gathering
• facilitate -> promote
• exchange -> interaction
• agenda -> schedule
• chance -> opportunity

Better sentence expression replacement suggestions:

• This party is aimed to facilitate the exchange of diverse culture and offer all you new international students a chance to learn about our university culture and life, through which we hope you will feel at home.
  “This gathering is designed to promote the interaction of diverse cultures and provide you, the new international students, with an opportunity to immerse yourselves in our university life, fostering a sense of belonging.”

• The agenda of this party includes a bus ride around the campus, tasting traditional Chinese food and watching the school opera.
  “The schedule for the event encompasses a tour around the campus, a sampling of traditional Chinese cuisine, and a performance of the school’s opera.”

• We sincerely invite you to join the party.
  “We wholeheartedly welcome you to participate in this event.”

Refined Essay 1

Notice
Dear International Students,

We are excited to announce that we will be hosting a gathering for international students next Friday at the central gym. This event is designed to promote the interaction of diverse cultures and provide you, the new international students, with an opportunity to immerse yourselves in our university life, fostering a sense of belonging.

The schedule for the event encompasses a tour around the campus, a sampling of traditional Chinese cuisine, and a performance of the school’s opera.

We wholeheartedly welcome you to participate in this event.
The Student Union

​ Notice
It is so great to hear that you, international students, have arrived at our university. This notice is for the purpose of inviting you to attend a welcome party.

To begin with, the party is scheduled to start at 19:00 on June 20 in the Center of Students’ Activities and last for approximately two hours. In addition, this party is characterized by a variety of interesting activities, including singing, dancing, Chinese culture introduction, and fun competitions. Of course, some traditional Chinese snacks will be served at the party. To conclude, it is advisable for you to participate in this party, which will bring you opportunities to make friends, arouse your passion for the campus life, and help you know China better.

Finally, we are looking forward to your participation.

The Students’ Union

Friday, June 10

DAY13

Dear friend.

I have received your last e-mail and learned that you are looking for some AI tools to improve your learning efficiency. I would like to offer you some guidance, hoping these can help you. Different AI models have different traits, so it depends on what you want to do. Considering that you are a green-hand[beginner], I highly recommend you the easiest but high-performed[high-performing] AI model – ABC, which has an outstanding capacity of reasoning and analysing[analyzing]. And the proper prompts are also the key of[to] using AI tools, which have a great difference on[in] the performance of the AI model.

If you have any question[questions] about the details, please don’t hesitate to ask.

Best wishes,
Litha.

Suggestions:

• e-mail -> email
• traits -> features
• guidance -> advice
• improve -> enhance
• capacity -> ability

Better sentence expression suggestions:

• I would like to offer you some guidance, hoping these can help you.
  “I would like to provide you with some advice that I hope will be beneficial.”

• Different AI models have different traits, so it depends on what you want to do.
  “Each AI model possesses unique features, so your choice depends on your specific needs.”

• Considering that you are a beginner, I highly recommend you the easiest but high-performing AI model – ABC, which has an outstanding capacity of reasoning and analyzing.
  “As you are new to this field, I highly suggest the easiest yet high-performing AI model – ABC, known for its exceptional reasoning and analytical abilities.”

• And the proper prompts are also the key of using AI tools, which have a great difference on the performance of the AI model.
  “Moreover, using appropriate prompts is crucial, as they significantly affect the performance of the AI model.”

• If you have any question about the details, please don’t hesitate to ask.
  “Should you have any questions regarding the details, please feel free to reach out.”

Refined Version 1:

Dear friend,

I hope this message finds you well. I recently received your email and learned that you are seeking AI tools to enhance your learning efficiency. I would like to provide you with some advice that I hope will be beneficial.

Each AI model possesses unique features, so your choice depends on your specific needs. As you are new to this field, I highly suggest the easiest yet high-performing AI model – ABC, known for its exceptional reasoning and analytical abilities. Moreover, using appropriate prompts is crucial, as they significantly affect the performance of the AI model.

Should you have any questions regarding the details, please feel free to reach out.

Best wishes,
Litha.

Refined Version 2:

Dear Sky,

I am quite pleased to hear that you are looking for AI tools to promote learning efficiency. Today, I am writing to make a recommendation.

It is advisable for you to try out several AI tools in learning since it is by trying them out that you can know which one can best suit your needs. A case in point is myself. As a senior who is preparing for the national entrance exams for postgraduate studies, I tried ERNIE Bot, Tongyi, and Kimi. In the end, I chose Kimi which is characterized by its excellent performance in information collection. This AI tool can bring me high efficiency, inspire my passion for learning, and help me save time and energy.

I am looking forward to discussing more details of the AI tools after you use them.

Best wishes,
Li Ming

DAY14

Dear Manager,
I’m writing this e-mail to express our disappointment to [with] the food and the service of the cafeteria that is in the charge of you [for which you are responsible]. Several fellow students and me [I] unanimously think there are some problems, which are as follows.
To start with, the food that the cafeteria offers are [is] always cold, sometimes even not fresh, preventing us from having a good appetite. In addition, the service is also far from good.
Considering it is a matter of food, we highly demand a prompt solution.
Best wishes,
Li Ming.

Suggestions for Vocabulary and Sentence Expressions:

1. express -> convey
2. disappointment -> dissatisfaction
3. food -> cuisine
4. service -> hospitality
5. not fresh -> stale

Better Sentence Expression Replacement Suggestions:

1. I’m writing this e-mail to express our disappointment with the food and the service of the cafeteria for which you are responsible.
   “I am reaching out to communicate our dissatisfaction with the cuisine and hospitality provided by the cafeteria under your supervision.”

2. Several fellow students and I unanimously think there are some problems, which are as follows.
   “Numerous fellow students and I firmly believe that there are several issues that need addressing.”

3. The food that the cafeteria offers is always cold, sometimes even stale, preventing us from having a good appetite.
   “The cuisine served in the cafeteria is frequently cold and at times stale, which detracts significantly from our appetite.”

4. In addition, the service is also far from good.
   “Moreover, the level of service provided is far from satisfactory.”

5. Considering it is a matter of food, we highly demand a prompt solution.
   “Given the critical nature of food service, we earnestly request an immediate resolution.”

Refined Essay 1:

Dear Manager,

I am reaching out to communicate our dissatisfaction with the cuisine and hospitality provided by the cafeteria under your supervision. Numerous fellow students and I firmly believe that there are several issues that need addressing.

Firstly, the meals served in the cafeteria are frequently cold and, at times, stale, which detracts significantly from our appetite. Moreover, the level of service provided is far from satisfactory, often leading to unnecessary delays during our limited lunch hours.

Given the critical nature of food service, we earnestly request an immediate resolution to these concerns. Your attention to this matter would greatly enhance our dining experience.

Best wishes,
Li Ming

Refined Essay 2:

Dear Manager,

I hope this message finds you well. I am writing on behalf of several students to express our dissatisfaction with the food quality and service in the school cafeteria. Recently, we have noticed a decline in the freshness and variety of meals offered, which has left many of us unsatisfied. Additionally, the service has become increasingly slow and unresponsive, causing frustration during our busy lunch hours.

We kindly urge you to address these issues promptly. Improving the quality of food and training staff to enhance service would greatly benefit the student body and contribute to a more pleasant dining experience.

Thank you for your attention to this matter.

Sincerely,
Li Ming

Refined Essay 3:

Dear Sir/Madam,
As a student in this university who often dines at the school cafeteria, I am writing for the purpose of making a complaint about the food and service there.
To begin with, compared with students’ demands, the variety of food is not adequate and we frequently fail to find what we want. Thus, it is advisable for you to offer more kinds of food. In addition, it is exceedingly necessary for you to lower the price because a host of poor students, including myself, cannot afford to eat. Finally, you are supposed to enhance the staff’s service attitudes as we seldom see their smiles.
I am convinced that with the above measures, the cafeteria service will be greatly improved.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming

DAY15

Step 1: Original Text with Errors Highlighted

Dear Prof. Thomas,

I hope this e-mail finds you well. I’m writing to extend my gratitude for your help with my study in the summer abroad program. I could not finish this program without your assistance. Besides, I’ve also learned much knowledge of other fields, which has greatly broadened my horizon.

To return your favor, I warmly invite you to visit my homeland—China. It will be a pleasure to be your guider[guide] during this tour, and I believe you will fall in love with this country after this experience.

I’m looking forward to your reply.

Sincerely,
Li Ming.

Step 2: Suggestions

Vocabulary Suggestions:

• help -> assistance
• much -> a great deal of
• horizon -> perspective
• return your favor -> show my appreciation
• guider -> guide

Better Sentence Expression Replacement Suggestions:

• I’m writing to extend my gratitude for your help with my study in the summer abroad program.
  “I am reaching out to express my heartfelt appreciation for your invaluable support during my summer study abroad program.”

• I could not finish this program without your assistance.
  “Your assistance was vital to the successful completion of this program.”

• I’ve also learned much knowledge of other fields, which has greatly broadened my horizon.
  “Furthermore, I have acquired extensive knowledge in various fields, significantly enriching my perspective.”

• It will be a pleasure to be your guider during this tour.
  “It would be an honor to be your guide throughout this journey.”

• I’m looking forward to your reply.
  “I eagerly await your response.”

Refined Essay 1:

Dear Prof. Thomas,

I hope this e-mail finds you in great spirits. I am reaching out to express my heartfelt appreciation for your invaluable support during my summer study abroad program. Your assistance was vital to the successful completion of this program. Furthermore, I have acquired extensive knowledge in various fields, significantly enriching my perspective.

As a gesture of my gratitude, I warmly invite you to visit my homeland—China. It would be an honor to be your guide throughout this journey, and I am confident that you will fall in love with the beauty and culture this country has to offer.

I eagerly await your response.

Sincerely,
Li Ming.

Refined Essay 2:

Dear Professor Thomas,

I hope this message finds you well. I am writing to express my sincere gratitude for your invaluable support during my summer study abroad program. Your guidance not only deepened my understanding of the subject but also inspired me to explore new ideas.

As a token of appreciation, I would like to invite you to visit China. There is so much beauty and culture to experience here, and it would be a pleasure to show you around. Your presence would surely add to the joy of my exploration.

Thank you once again!

Warm regards,
Li Ming

Refined Essay 3:

Dear Prof. Thomas,

I am quite pleased to recall the summer when I attended the study abroad program in your country. Today, I am writing for the purpose of extending my gratitude and inviting you to visit China.

To begin with, it was your tremendous help that enabled me to enjoy a comfortable and fruitful trip of learning. Thus, I am deeply grateful to you for your help. In addition, I know that you are fond of China’s ancient architecture. Accordingly, I deem that it is advisable for you to visit in person the Great Wall, the Summer Palace, the Forbidden City and so on in your spare time.

I am looking forward to your favorable reply at your earliest convenience so that I can repay you.

Yours sincerely,
Li Ming

DAY16

Original Text with Errors Highlighted:

Dear Jane,

I hope this e-mail finds you well. I’m quite pleased to learn that you are preparing for a speech contest on Chinese culture. I would like to suggest you [suggest to you] the topic of Chinese ancient poetry. The reasons are as follows.

To start with, Chinese ancient poetry is the most iconic symbol of Chinese culture, which is the concentrate of Chinese traditional literature. In addition, Chinese ancient poetry has unique meter and rhythm, really making people compelling [captivated].

I would like to arrange a time to assist you, hoping this can help you get a higher rank.

Sincerely,
Li Ming.

Suggestions:

1. suggest -> recommend
2. iconic -> emblematic
3. concentrate -> essence
4. compelling -> engaging
5. help you get -> support you in achieving

Better Sentence Expression Replacement Suggestions:

1. I would like to suggest you the topic of Chinese ancient poetry.
   “I would like to recommend the topic of Chinese ancient poetry.”

2. The reasons are as follows.
   “Here are the reasons supporting my choice.”

3. In addition, Chinese ancient poetry has unique meter and rhythm, really making people compelling.
   “Furthermore, Chinese ancient poetry possesses a unique meter and rhythm that truly engages its audience.”

4. To start with, Chinese ancient poetry is the most iconic symbol of Chinese culture.
   “Firstly, Chinese ancient poetry stands as an emblematic representation of our cultural heritage.”

5. I would like to arrange a time to assist you, hoping this can help you get a higher rank.
   “I would like to schedule a time to assist you, as I believe this will support you in achieving greater success.”

Refined version 1:

Dear Jane,

I hope this email finds you in great spirits. I am delighted to learn that you are preparing for a speech contest focusing on Chinese culture. For your consideration, I would like to recommend the topic of Chinese ancient poetry. Here are the reasons supporting my choice.

Firstly, Chinese ancient poetry stands as an iconic representation of our cultural heritage, capturing the essence of traditional literature in China. Furthermore, it possesses a unique meter and rhythm that truly engages its audience.

I would like to schedule a time to assist you, as I believe this will support you in achieving greater success.

Warm regards,
Li Ming.

Refined version 2:

Dear Jane,

I hope this email finds you well! I wanted to suggest a topic for your upcoming speech contest: “The Influence of Traditional Chinese Festivals on Modern Society.” This topic beautifully intertwines our rich cultural heritage with contemporary life, showcasing how traditions shape our values and community spirit today.

To help you prepare, I’d love to meet this Saturday afternoon. We can brainstorm ideas and structure your speech together. Please let me know if that works for you!

Looking forward to our session!

Best,
Li Ming

Refined version 3:

Dear Jane,

I am very happy to hear that you have signed up for a speech contest on Chinese culture. I am writing to suggest a topic.

To begin with, it is advisable for you to choose China’s ancient architecture as your topic since China is characterized by its time-honored history and I know that you are fond of China’s ancient buildings. In addition, you are supposed to visit the Great Wall, the Summer Palace, and the Forbidden City, which will bring you distinctive experience, arouse your passion for Chinese culture, and help you prepare fully for the contest.

Finally, if you have any other questions, please call me and I will be available every Friday morning.

Best wishes,
Li Ming

DAY18

Dear James,

I hope this e-mail finds you well. It is with profound regret and apology[apologies] to tell you that I cannot pick you up at the airport as originally scheduled, as my dissertation was rejected, needing a immediate solution.

I feel immensely sorry for the inconvenience this may cause. And[Moreover] I hope you understand my decision. To make up for my absence, I would like to call my brother to pick you up, then we will have lunch at Xiaoli’s restaurant, known for its excellent Chinese cuisine.

Once again, I sincerely apologize for this change.

Yours,
Liming.

Suggestions:

Vocabulary Improvements:

• e-mail -> email
• profound -> deep
• excellent -> outstanding
• inconvenience -> disruption
• regret -> remorse

Better Sentence Expressions:

• It is with profound regret and apology to tell you that I cannot pick you up at the airport as originally scheduled.
  “I am deeply remorseful to inform you that I am unable to pick you up from the airport as initially planned.”

• As my dissertation was rejected, which needs a immediately immediate solution.
  “Due to the rejection of my dissertation, I am faced with an urgent situation that requires my attention.”

• I feel immensely sorry for the inconvenience this may cause.
  “I sincerely apologize for any disruption this may cause to your plans.”

• And I hope you understand my decision.
  “I trust that you will understand my predicament.”

• To make up for my absence, I would like to call my brother to pick you up.
  “To compensate for my absence, I will arrange for my brother to meet you instead.”

Refined Essay 1:

Dear James,

I hope this email finds you in good spirits. I am writing to express my deep remorse for being unable to pick you up from the airport this Saturday, as we originally planned. Unfortunately, I must attend to an urgent matter related to my dissertation, which was unexpectedly rejected.

I sincerely apologize for any disruption this may cause to your plans. I trust that you will understand my predicament. To compensate for my absence, I will arrange for my brother to meet you at the airport. He is well-acquainted with the area and will assist you in settling in comfortably. Following your arrival, we can enjoy a delightful meal together at Xiaoli’s restaurant, renowned for its outstanding Chinese cuisine.

Thank you for your understanding, and I eagerly look forward to seeing you soon.

Warm regards,
Li Ming

predicament 窘境

Refined Essay 2:

Dearest James,

I am so immensely sorry, but something unexpected has come up, preventing me from picking you up at the airport this Saturday as planned. I feel terrible about this last-minute change and sincerely apologize for any inconvenience it may cause.

To make amends, I’ve arranged for a reliable private car service to collect you. They will be holding a sign with your name at the arrivals gate. The driver’s contact information is xxx-xxx. Please contact them if there are any issues.

Again, I am truly sorry for this unforeseen disruption. I’m so excited for your visit to China and I look forward to seeing you soon!

Warmly,

Li Ming

Dear Sir or Madam,
As a student who lives here, I found that restrictions on the use of plastic bags haven’t made a good effect [impact] in some regions, thus “White Pollution” is still going on. So, I’m writing for the purpose of proposing several suggestions.
To begin with, it is advisable for the government to give out bags which are made of more environment-friendly materials to the residents for free, so that providing [to provide] a better choice to pack up their orders instead of plastic bags. In addition, local departments should formulate comprehensive rules and regulations on the manufacturing and use of plastic products. Last but not least, the committees of the local communities are expected to hold relevant activities or contests such as picking up plastic things discarded [littered] somewhere.
Your prompt attention to my suggestions would be highly appreciated. Please feel free to call me at 123456 if you [incomplete sentence] [have any questions.]

Vocabulary Suggestions:

• good -> significant
• give out -> distribute
• pack up -> transport
• relevant -> pertinent
• things -> debris
• appreciated -> valued

Sentence Expression Replacements:

1. As a student who lives here, I found that restrictions on the use of plastic bags haven’t made a good impact in some regions, thus “White Pollution” is still going on.
   -> “Despite existing restrictions, plastic pollution remains a significant problem in some areas, prompting this proposal for improved solutions.”

2. So, I’m writing for the purpose of proposing several suggestions.
   -> “I am writing to propose several practical solutions to address this issue.”

3. To begin with, it is advisable for the government to give out bags which are made of more environment-friendly materials to the residents for free, so that to provide a better choice to transport their orders instead of plastic bags.
   -> “A government-sponsored initiative to distribute free, eco-friendly bags could offer a viable alternative to plastic bags for consumers.”

4. In addition, local departments should formulate comprehensive rules and regulations on the manufacturing and use of plastic products.
   -> “Furthermore, stringent regulations on the production and consumption of plastic products are crucial.”

5. Last but not least, the committees of the local communities are expected to hold pertinent activities or contests such as picking up plastic debris littered somewhere.
   -> “Finally, community-led initiatives, such as clean-up drives and awareness campaigns, can contribute significantly to mitigating this problem.”

Refined Essay:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Despite existing restrictions, plastic pollution remains a significant problem in some areas, prompting this proposal for improved solutions. I am writing to propose several practical solutions to address this issue.

A government-sponsored initiative to distribute free, eco-friendly bags could offer a viable alternative to plastic bags for consumers. Furthermore, stringent regulations on the production and consumption of plastic products are crucial. These regulations should encompass the entire lifecycle of plastic, from manufacturing to disposal. Finally, community-led initiatives, such as clean-up drives and public awareness campaigns, can contribute significantly to mitigating this problem. Increased public awareness regarding the environmental consequences of plastic waste is also essential for long-term success.

Your prompt attention to these suggestions would be highly valued. Please feel free to contact me at 123456 if you have any questions.

DAY19

Step 1: Here’s the original text with errors highlighted:

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing for the purpose of applying for a volunteer position at the center of Culture Interchange. I eagerly seek for [an] opportunity to share our Chinese traditional culture [traditional Chinese culture] to foreign friends and learn their cultures at the same time. It’s thrilling for me to immerse myself in the vivid collision of different cultures. And here are some reasons to show my competence for this position.

To start with, I can speak fluent English and have a good command of different culture [cultural] backgrounds. In addition, I am outgoing and happy to exchange with foreigners, which I think aligns well with the goal of this organization.

I eagerly await your favourable reply.

Sincerely,
Lining.

Step 2: Vocabulary and sentence suggestions:

Vocabulary suggestions:

• center -> centre
• Culture Interchange -> Cultural Interchange
• seek -> pursue
• competence -> capability
• favourable -> favorable

Better sentence expression suggestions:

• I eagerly seek for an open opportunity to share our culture, Chinese traditional culture, to foreign friends and learn their cultures at the same time.
  “I am keen to pursue an opportunity to share our rich traditional Chinese culture with foreign friends while also embracing their diverse cultures.”

• It’s thrilling for me to immerse myself in the vivid collision of different cultures.
  “I find it exhilarating to immerse myself in the vibrant interplay of diverse cultures.”

• To start with, I can speak fluent English and have a good command of different culture backgrounds.
  “Firstly, I possess fluency in English and a profound understanding of various cultural backgrounds.”

• In addition, I am outgoing and happy to exchange with foreigners, which I think aligns well with the goal of this organization.
  “Moreover, my outgoing nature and enthusiasm for engaging with foreigners align perfectly with the organization’s mission.”

• I eagerly await your favourable reply.
  “I look forward with great anticipation to your favorable response.”

Refined Article 1:

Dear Mr./Madam,

I am writing to apply for a volunteer position at the Centre of Cultural Interchange. I am keen to pursue an opportunity to share our rich traditional Chinese culture with foreign friends while also embracing their diverse cultures. I find it exhilarating to immerse myself in the vibrant interplay of various cultures. Below, I outline several reasons that demonstrate my capability for this position.

Firstly, I possess fluency in English and a profound understanding of various cultural backgrounds. Moreover, my outgoing nature and enthusiasm for engaging with foreigners align perfectly with the organization’s mission.

I look forward with great anticipation to your favorable response.

Sincerely,
Lining.

Refined Article 2:

Dear Center of Cultural Interchange Team,

I am writing to express my sincere interest in volunteer opportunities at your esteemed organization. My name is Li Ming, and I am passionate about fostering cultural exchange and understanding among diverse communities.

With a background in intercultural communication and previous volunteering experience with local cultural initiatives, I possess a unique blend of skills that align well with your mission. My proficiency in multiple languages and commitment to promoting inclusivity make me an ideal candidate for this role. I am eager to contribute my time and energy to support the Center’s goals.

Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to an opportunity to discuss how I can contribute further.

Warm regards,

Li Ming

DAY20

Step 1: Original Text with Errors Highlighted

Dear Jack,
I hope this letter finds you well. I’m quite pleased to learn that you are planning a trip to China for a deep perception on [of] Chinese festival [festivals]. For your consideration, I would like to recommend the Spring Festival, the most important festival to [for] Chinese [Chinese people]. Here are some reasons supporting my recommendation.
To start with, the Spring Festival origined [originated] thousands of years ago, having a longer history than other festivals. For this reason, you will have more insight and comprehension into Chinese culture by [through] Spring Festival. In addition, The Spring Festival is the most thrilling and delighting [delightful] festival, as nearly every Chinese will observe it.
I sincerely hope you will enjoy your trip.
Yours,
Li Ning

Step 2: Suggestions for Improvement

Vocabulary Suggestions:

• deep -> profound
• festival -> celebration
• thrilling -> exhilarating
• delighting -> enchanting
• important -> significant

Better Sentence Expression Suggestions:

1. I hope this letter finds you well.
   “I trust that this letter finds you in good spirits.”

2. I’m quite pleased to learn that you are planning a trip to China for a deeper perception of Chinese festivals.
   “I am thrilled to hear about your upcoming trip to China to gain a deeper understanding of Chinese festivities.”

3. Here are some reasons supporting my recommendation.
   “Below are several compelling reasons for my recommendation.”

4. To start with, the Spring Festival originated thousands of years ago, having a longer history than other festivals.
   “First and foremost, the Spring Festival has its roots thousands of years ago, boasting a history far richer than that of other celebrations.”

5. I sincerely hope you will enjoy your trip.
   “I genuinely hope that your journey will be a delightful and enriching experience.”

Refined Overall Essay

Dear Jack,

I trust that this letter finds you in good spirits. I am thrilled to hear about your upcoming trip to China to gain a deeper understanding of Chinese festivities. For your consideration, I would highly recommend the Spring Festival, which is the most significant celebration for the Chinese people. Below are several compelling reasons for my recommendation.

First and foremost, the Spring Festival has its roots thousands of years ago, boasting a history far richer than that of other celebrations. This gives you the opportunity to acquire greater insight into the cultural heritage of China through the lens of this remarkable festival. Moreover, the Spring Festival is the most exhilarating and enchanting event, as nearly every Chinese person actively participates in its observance.

I genuinely hope that your journey will be a delightful and enriching experience.

Yours,
Li Ning

DAY21

Step 1: Original Text with Errors Highlighted

Dear Jack,

I hope this letter finds you well. I understand you are feeling bad with[about] your maths midterm exam. Don’t worry, my friend. It’s okay to have a rest and reflect your[on your] learning methods. A casual failure won’t beat you down, but make[will make] you stronger, right? For your consideration, I would like to provide you with some advice on maths learning[learning maths], which are[is] as follows.

First and foremost, kindly use a notebook to record your corrections and reflections of[on] your everyday maths practice, enabling you to revise and enhance these knowledge. In addition, make a mindmap for every chapter you learn which will greatly help you sort out these complicated links and connections between these knowledge points.

May you have a[make] great progress on[in] your maths soon!

Yours sincerely,
Lining

Step 2: Vocabulary and Sentence Expression Suggestions

Vocabulary Suggestions:

• bad -> disheartened
• have a rest -> take a break
• learning methods -> study strategies
• casual failure -> temporary setback
• beat you down -> discourage you
• note -> notebook
• reflections -> insights
• enhance -> consolidate
• complicated -> complex
• knowledge points -> concepts
• great progress -> significant improvements

Sentence Expression Suggestions:

1. Original: I understand you are feeling bad about your maths midterm exam.
   “I understand that you are disheartened by your recent maths midterm results.”

2. Original: It’s okay to have a rest and reflect on your learning methods.
   “It’s perfectly fine to take a break and reassess your study strategies.”

3. Original: A casual failure won’t beat you down, but will make you stronger, right?
   “A temporary setback won’t discourage you; instead, it will strengthen your resolve, right?”

4. Original: For your consideration, I would like to provide you with some advice on learning maths, which is as follows.
   “With this in mind, I’d like to offer you some recommendations on mastering maths, as outlined below.”

5. Original: First and foremost, kindly use a notebook to record your corrections and reflections on your everyday maths practice, enabling you to revise and enhance this knowledge.
   “Firstly, consider maintaining a notebook to document your corrections and insights from daily maths practice, allowing you to revise and consolidate your understanding.”

6. Original: In addition, make a mindmap for every chapter you learn which will greatly help you sort out these complicated links and connections between these knowledge points.
   “Furthermore, creating a mind map for each chapter will significantly assist you in clarifying the complex relationships between various concepts.”

7. Original: May you make great progress in your maths soon!
   “I hope you achieve significant improvements in your maths studies soon!”

Refined Essay:

Dear Jack,

I hope this letter finds you well. I understand that you are disheartened by your recent maths midterm results. Don’t worry, my friend. It’s perfectly fine to take a break and reassess your study strategies. A temporary setback won’t discourage you; instead, it will strengthen your resolve, right? With this in mind, I’d like to offer you some recommendations on mastering maths, as outlined below.

Firstly, consider maintaining a notebook to document your corrections and insights from your daily maths practice, allowing you to revise and consolidate your understanding. Additionally, creating a mind map for each chapter will significantly assist you in clarifying the complex relationships between various concepts.

I hope you achieve significant improvements in your maths studies soon!

Yours sincerely,
Lining

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关切、慰问——DAY 9/10/11/21
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感谢——DAY 7/8/15
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